To reflect my understanding of the events of Lord of the Flies from chapters 1 to 4, I wrote through the eyes of the main character, Piggy, and itallics are what others say to him. This is also written in mild Cockney to reflect Piggy's background.
Savage Innocence
by Wenwei
Piggy
There was that pilot, up in the cabin in front an’ an’
A boy named Ralph swimming an’ we found a conch on the island
Sucks to your ass-mar, sucks to your auntie
So long as they don’t call me what they used to, they used to call me Piggy
An’ Piggy I was and that was better than Fatty.
Tall thin an’ bony an’ red hair under a square cap black
Boy in a floatin’ cloak named Jack
Head of Hunters an’ we don’t want you
It don’t matter I was with Ralph when he found the conch too.
Fire on the mountain Ralph says and for burning use his specs
I can’t see, I can’t see, my specs, give me my specs-
I can see but I don’t see no good fire, no smoke, only flame
Conch in my hand an’ the conch doesn’t count on top of the mountain it became
Flames alive like a creeping jaguar an’ they got their small fire all right
Ralph don’t listen, no one don’t listen an’ a littlun disappears out of sight.
Out hunting Jack was an’ along with him went the fire
He didn’t ought to have let it out, he’d promised not to an’ we missed that ship prior--
Madness; sheer into sharp blue eyes an’ another step Jack took
Fisting my body into knots; so that it shook
In pain an’ much more. All over again my name was Fatty an’ I couldn’t see
Specs back on me nose an’ now I only got one eye (I couldn’t really see)
Just you wait, Jack. Just you wait.
-- Helping Sarah post as she is experiencing technical difficulties --
ReplyDeleteWenwei, I have to say that I am extremely impressed with your poem ! I didn't expect anyone to write a poem for the project and this is pretty impressive for students like us. The poem that you wrote is full of descriptive words and I also liked that you included literary techniques such as rhyme in your poem. I think that you have had a rather impressive grasp of Piggy's thoughts and feelings in the various situations that you mentioned to be able to produce a deep poem like " Savage Innocence". I also really liked it when you mentioned " I can't see, I can't see, my specs, give me my specs-" as it showed the part when Piggy was extremely vulnerable because he did not have his spectacles. It showed me what Piggy was going through and how he felt. For example, I could feel and almost visualise the desperation that Piggy had for his spectacles and how much he wanted it. It was all because Piggy's spectacles were snatched or stolen and not given by permission. Thus this line also shows the amount of disrespect that the other boys had for Piggy. This sentence alone had also evoked many feelings inside of me. One of which included sympathy. I was impressed that you included what other people might have left out or treated as insignificant. I also liked that you mentioned that the conch did not count on the mountain even if it was in Piggy's hands and the fire that broke out after that. A deep understanding of the book and the characters as well as having to go through several thought processes is required to write a poem that expresses such emotions and situations. Thus, I would also like to applaud you for your excellent command of English and for your attempt to write the poem!
- Sarah